Critique Away!

Discussion in 'General Discussion' started by Jarrell, Apr 30, 2005.

  1. Jarrell

    Jarrell

    Feb 13, 2005
    Macon, Ga.
    Below is the view from the side of my house, looking south. This was taken right after a rain storm and the light was beautiful... but I don't think I caught it. Anyway, composition wise... what does the picture need in your opinion.
    Don't worry.. I'm pretty thick skinned. Besides, I asked for it. :wink:
    42771330.
    Nikon D100 w Tamron 28-70mm lens @2.8 and 1/60th second iso 100
    Jarrell
     
  2. In my opinion, so take it with some salt. It lacks a focus
    point. Technically its great but I would like to see a point
    of interest.
     
  3. Agreed; it needs a crop, perhaps. The treed area may have interesting contrast if cropped.

    Rich
     
  4. Hi Jerrel,

    I just read this in the "Readers Digest" photo book this afternoon so it just has to be true. :)

    Divide the picture in thirds from top to bottom. One third for the sky, one third for the middle (the grove of trees in your pic) and one third for the foreground. I think something to focus upon in the foreground would help your composition. Could be anything, a rock, a flower, even an old tree stump.

    HTH,
     
  5. I think the rule of thirds is only guideline that can be broken
    if it is justified by the subject of the shot. Although I do agree
    that it requires something in the foreground. Even a big tree
    off to one side would do it.
     
  6. gho

    gho

    Feb 7, 2005
    California
    What's that little white spot on the left? Is that a house? I think that would make such an awsome large print panorama if it is. The leading line of the tree tops point directly to it!

    WOW What vision! You are definately my idol.
     
  7. Chris101

    Chris101

    Feb 2, 2005
    Arizona
    Jarrell, I like the abstract qualities this photo has. One of my very favorite painters is Mark Rothko, and I can stare for quite long periods at the line that divides his color patches. This photo has much the same quality - The green of the group of trees seems to boil into the sky.

    I dunno about the one on the left, but I'd clone out the one on the right.
     
  8. It is a simple picture with nice subtle colors making it easy to look at. Perhaps a short poem in the upper right hand side would do the trick.
     
  9. Jarrell

    Jarrell

    Feb 13, 2005
    Macon, Ga.
    Good! Anyone else?
     
  10. gho

    gho

    Feb 7, 2005
    California
    ugh, I ment my "other left" I must be dyslexic too! hey depends on the amount of detail. When sized for web, it may not be readily viewable as such, but in print, if it has enough detail, I think it would be really awsome as a subject and very clever with the tree line.
     
  11. Hi, Jarrell.

    Since you insist, :D I think I might've gone for something completely different if I were there -- but this is hindsight w/out actually been there of course. :D

    In general, I would've probably gone for a completely different POV primarily to play w/ the landscape there or to show off the wild golden grass(or is it wheat?). And I would probably go w/ a completely different lens for this, either something wider or something longer.

    For instance, if I had spotted the distant white house as Gregory did in your photo, I might've played the golden wheat field (or just a couple yards wide of it) against the distant house in the background. A long lens and getting lower perspective would probably be needed in this case unless I could find a higher vantage point to shoot from. Maybe throw in just the "right" end of that nearby patch of trees perhaps for balance depending on the exact choice of composition. Another possibility is to get much closer to that house and then go for a wideangle that either plays the field more or the sky more from higher or lower POV.

    For me, part of the problem is the sky isn't all that interesting, but it's taking up so much of the frame. And the nearby patch of tree is rather non-descript although it shows a little promise w/ its shape. And as a landscape, I don't find too much of interest in terms of patterns and such in this particular view.

    Might I suggest checking out Ed Ley's landscapes from Southern Cal for some ideas -- he's an occasional visiter at DPR (and shoot mostly film w/ Nikon gear, not digital :D although he finally picked up a DSLR w/ the D2H not long ago)? There are some really awesome photos in that collection, IMHO. And I always enjoy chatting w/ him on DPR when I "bump" into him there:

    http://www.blackmallard.com/cal_ls/

    Hmmm... Maybe we can even invite him to come visit us here -- maybe the next time I "bump" into him. :D

    Anyway, those are my humble opinions since you insisted. :D

    Kind regards,

    _Man_
     
  12. There was only one thing missing, Jarrell, but I fixed it :lol:.

    42781270.
     
  13. gho

    gho

    Feb 7, 2005
    California
    Frank, hey, that's really good! How did you do that?
     
  14. My two cents:

    I would like to see the same scene but much wider angle. More of the foreground and sky and bit less of the middle green.

    The scene has three interesting layers. Actually four if you count the open field and the trees as two.

    I think it has a lot of potential, and frankly I don't mind it the way it is.

    Personally, I think capturing the place doesn't have to include a focus such as a building, animal, etc. It can just make me ponder standing there myself.
     
  15. Jarrell

    Jarrell

    Feb 13, 2005
    Macon, Ga.
    Lol... I love it!
    Jarrell :lol:
     
  16. Jarrell

    Jarrell

    Feb 13, 2005
    Macon, Ga.
    I agree with all of the above, it needed something. Maybe like this?
    42791978.
    There was no real center of interest to pull you into the shot or make you look at a certain spot. But sometimes just the light itself is good enough for a picture. Catching it just right is another thing entirely though.
    Jarrell
     
  17. That definitely adds a center of interest and balances the image nicely.
     
  18. jgrove

    jgrove

    489
    Apr 13, 2005
    Halesowen,UK
    Oh yes, thats my favourite, my daughter would like that picture as she has just been the West Midlands Safari Park here in the UK. Thanks for sharing it!
     
  19. Photoshop. I just added the giraffe on a top layer, and then flattened the image.
     
  20. Mike Field

    Mike Field Guest

    Jarrell

    I think it is a pretty setting. I suspect what you were trying to get a photo of was the beautiful light. Had you captured it the image would have probably been considerably different and much more inviting. The light was the reason, the story. As others mentioned I would have cropped out some sky as it doesn't offer a lot. I wish the side of my house looked like yours!
     
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