For my tastes, both images have been softened too much in post-processing ; although I appreciate that you probably are aiming for the soft focus/glamour effect. The whites of her eyes in both images have been brightened a bit too much - I would back off a bit. Pity there are no catchlights in her eyes in the 2nd photo, to really draw your attention.
Overall though, I like the pose and expression in the 2nd photo and think it has the basis for a very good picture. Could maybe add a post-processing vignette to further center the focus of attention on her face ?