Critique I'm in a rut and trying to get out

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I've had a string of demanding clients lately. I'm not a full time pro, so it's hitting me harder than it would if I were (I think). In any case, the photography income has been good, but it has really dampened my love of the craft. So, I decided to change it up a bit and shake the dust off of my 14-24 and do a photo walk, just for the joy of it. Nothing fancy here - just a few shots that made me stop and compose.

1. Bridge
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2. Window panes and their shadows
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3. Please Do Not Climb
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4. New bench
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5. Snow Log
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In #1, I wish the foreground piece of metal was in focus. It would also be fun to see that scene focus-stacked to make everything in focus.
Absolutely right, Mike. I just stopped down to f/11 and focused 1/3 of the way into the scene, but this image would definitely be stronger if, at minimum, the bottom of the frame were sharp. Thanks for the comment!
 

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Just some thoughts.... The 14-24 is a fantastic lens. My favorite for architecture and for scenes that have a strong foreground or even a strong foreground, middle ground and background! This series it appears you were focused on leading lines.... right?

#1 - nice leading lines, but I feel the photo lacks a subject at the end of those lines and the foreground is empty except for the OOF ??

#2 - Hmmmm..... I feel there are two photos here. The top photo without the floor. The bottom photo without the walls! LOL!

#3 - I liked this one the best and played with it for just a few minutes... BTW - your sensor really needs cleaned... the spots you see are after I removed a lot of other ones. ;)
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#4 - Tough one. Just doesn't work for me. What were you trying to convey?

#5 - Horizon slants to the left. Is the log the subject? Then make it prominent in the scene. The whole scene seems cluttered.
 
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Karen's brighter version of #3 is definitely an important improvement for me. Consider cropping that one so the top left arm goes beyond the frame, which makes the composition more dynamic for me and gives me a greater sense of the subject's height.

#2 - Hmmmm..... I feel there are two photos here. The top photo without the floor. The bottom photo without the walls! LOL!
That image could definitely be broken up into the two images you mentioned. However, the current version also works fine for me mostly because I see it as a cacophony of lines going in just about every direction.
 
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This series it appears you were focused on leading lines.... right?
Yes! I was definitely looking for lines - perhaps not the best use of the 14-24, but that seemed to be what I was seeing on the day.
#1 - nice leading lines, but I feel the photo lacks a subject at the end of those lines and the foreground is empty except for the OOF ??
Definitely needed more DOF here. No tripod, so I just placed the focus target 1/3 of the way into the scene and went with f/11. I don't think stopping down more would have brought the FG into focus, and while there was something interesting in the BG, the WA made it irrelevant. Perhaps this would have been better with a telephoto to compress the BG into the frame and about 50 paces backward.
I feel there are two photos here.
I was trying to compose to include the windows and the shadows cast by their panes, but there is a bit too much dead space in the middle.
#3 - I liked this one the best and played with it for just a few minutes... BTW - your sensor really needs cleaned...
Yes, overdue for a cleaning, and thanks for the PP suggestion.
#4 - Tough one. Just doesn't work for me. What were you trying to convey?
I wanted to accentuate the freshly cut lumber at dissimilar lengths causing uneven ends. Then, I decided to try to compose so that the entire bench was in view, but that leaves the eye wondering, doesn't it?
Is the log the subject? Then make it prominent in the scene. The whole scene seems cluttered.
I had hoped to catch a sun star and the log together in an interesting way. One of the dangers of the WA - it's easy to have too much going on at once.

Karen, I truly appreciate your taking the time to comment thoughtfully - very helpful, as always!
 
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