Playground break

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My 3-year old son taking a short break from the action at the playground. Constructive critique appreciated.

D70, 85mm f/1.4 AF-D, ISO 200, 1/640 sec, f/2.2
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gilbert said:
My 3-year old son taking a short break from the action at the playground. Constructive critique appreciated.

D70, 85mm f/1.4 AF-D, ISO 200, 1/640 sec, f/2.2
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Gilbert,

This is really excellent. Your composition is striking and the use of B&W is right on the money. I'd frame it.

Tom
 
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Excellent shot Gilbert. I really like the expression and pose/prop (very natural looking shot). One change I would try is an 8x10 crop. Although I really like the negative space I'd prefer it if his head position where closer to the intersection of the top 1/3 and right 1/3 of the image. This still maintains a nice amount of negative space but gives more focus to him as the subject. I also agree with the suggestion to add a vignette.

Overall it's an excellent shot - thanks for sharing. :D
 
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All: Thanks for the kind comments and cc.

Rad: I think that darkening the corners is a great idea!

Joe: Thanks for the suggestion. An 8x10 crop feels a little too 'short' to me because I think I like the wall extending a bit further with the 8x12 crop. I'll probably end up printing it as an 8x10 just to get it into my standard mat sizes and maybe it will grow on me.

I took the idea of darkening the corners a little further and created a sideways teardrop vignette where the narrow side of the teardrop is on the left. Also, after staring at it a bit more today, the image felt flat to me, so I adjusted the curves to give a bit more contrast. Let me know what you think of the modified image. Thanks!

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